Friday, February 6, 2009

55 - i wave you goodbye



every friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a try...post your story and report to the boss G-Man!





with a tear in my eye
in my soul a sigh
i hold you close
shutting out my sorrows
as i watch you go
with your bags in tow
for some time away
while i will stay
counting the hours
‘til the time’s again ours

…with a tear in my eye
i wave you goodbye







37 comments:

  1. Awwwwwwwww, until the return then. [the photo you chose is so perfect] I just so continue to LOVE your work Shadow. Simply amazing.

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  2. Sshhh, dear... I'll be back before you know it.

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  3. Shadow,
    This hits so close to home...
    You don't even know!
    I really really loved this 55.
    Have a GREAT Week-End....G

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  4. yep, this hits home for me too. I'm missing someone big time right now.

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  5. beautiful poem of love held. Great pic, too. ~Rick

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  6. My blog isn't private. I've been doing Fiction in 58, my own creation, long before Fiction in 55. I like to write short and tense.

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  7. O dear, I was missing my son so much...& now you have me tearing up...

    Great 55ve Shadow...

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  8. Ahhh, sorry. That's where I have been testing HTML coding. I should just end it. Can't seem to find a template I truly like. Your poetry is very captivating. I also am overseer of a writing prompt called Three Word Wednesday. You should check it out. I think you'd like it.

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  9. well, if it hadda been me i woulda left a 'hanky' for that tear!

    lovely piece, have an awesome weekend.

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  10. Very poinant, Shadow....Don't cry! I put one up...

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  11. Very loving and sentimental in the best of ways, the reminder of the goodbye!

    Beautiful.

    G

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  12. Parting is such sweet sorrow,
    which lasts 'til we meet on the morrow.

    With apologies to whoever it was that said "Parting is such sweet sorrow." Willy, I think.

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  13. This is fabulous! And completely hits home for me, because my hubby just left on a trip. Beautifully done.

    I may try to write one of these today.

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  14. You are the best using the 55 words..I promised to try it but I never did..
    I will post the award tomorrow on my blog..thanks again.

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  15. This is all very well (its lovely btw!) but how glamorous is the tear? You see, when I cry, my face swells up and snot goes everywhere...

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  16. Oh I've been there. You described the feeling so well in 55 words.

    Mine's up too.

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  17. Thanks, now I'm tearin up over here!!
    I'm missing my 2nd cousins...one is now back home in Australia and the other is enjoying the warmth of sunny LA....:) Have a great weekend!

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  18. Its as if you know shadow somehow whats going on in my mind, weird but calming

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  19. “So hold her closer when she cries, hold her closer when she feels. She needs a hand to hold, someone who will never let her go again. And hold him closer when he tries to hold the tears back from his eyes. Don't say goodbye.” ~Song: Hold Her Closer

    Lovely Shadow... Hope your weekend goes well :)

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  20. Moving poem. And I really like the picture, too. Good paring with the poem. Nice job! D

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  21. You do a great thing with only 55 words! Splendid Shadow.

    CLAY

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  22. darn good! Your words always run deep.

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  23. Hmmm-read your post on mine....are we on some weird psychic frequency you suppose?

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  24. I know more than I really wish about goodbye. Beautifully done.

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  25. god you are good!!!

    oh and bloody inspiring!

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  26. Thanks, I even have have that tear now

    peace hugs and kisses
    steve

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  27. Did you just read my mind. With everything going on in my little world your writings all ways bring me back to center

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  28. I can never help feeling the raw emotion in your words. Your a beautiful soulful writer dear one! (Hugs)Indigo

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  29. Quite a challenge, a story in so few words. Well done.

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  30. Some people believe goodbyes do not exist, but only "until next times..."

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  31. OMG, the sorrow and feeling. "til the time's again ours". wonderment of words!

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