every friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a try...post your story and report to the boss G-Man!
with a tear in my eye
in my soul a sigh
i hold you close
shutting out my sorrows
as i watch you go
with your bags in tow
for some time away
while i will stay
counting the hours
‘til the time’s again ours
in my soul a sigh
i hold you close
shutting out my sorrows
as i watch you go
with your bags in tow
for some time away
while i will stay
counting the hours
‘til the time’s again ours
…with a tear in my eye
i wave you goodbye
i wave you goodbye
37 cool comments:
Awwwwwwwww, until the return then. [the photo you chose is so perfect] I just so continue to LOVE your work Shadow. Simply amazing.
Sshhh, dear... I'll be back before you know it.
Shadow,
This hits so close to home...
You don't even know!
I really really loved this 55.
Have a GREAT Week-End....G
yep, this hits home for me too. I'm missing someone big time right now.
Great 55. Photo is perfect.
beautiful poem of love held. Great pic, too. ~Rick
My blog isn't private. I've been doing Fiction in 58, my own creation, long before Fiction in 55. I like to write short and tense.
O dear, I was missing my son so much...& now you have me tearing up...
Great 55ve Shadow...
Ahhh, sorry. That's where I have been testing HTML coding. I should just end it. Can't seem to find a template I truly like. Your poetry is very captivating. I also am overseer of a writing prompt called Three Word Wednesday. You should check it out. I think you'd like it.
well, if it hadda been me i woulda left a 'hanky' for that tear!
lovely piece, have an awesome weekend.
Very poinant, Shadow....Don't cry! I put one up...
Very loving and sentimental in the best of ways, the reminder of the goodbye!
Beautiful.
G
Parting is such sweet sorrow,
which lasts 'til we meet on the morrow.
With apologies to whoever it was that said "Parting is such sweet sorrow." Willy, I think.
how sweet, how sad ...
This is fabulous! And completely hits home for me, because my hubby just left on a trip. Beautifully done.
I may try to write one of these today.
You are the best using the 55 words..I promised to try it but I never did..
I will post the award tomorrow on my blog..thanks again.
This is all very well (its lovely btw!) but how glamorous is the tear? You see, when I cry, my face swells up and snot goes everywhere...
Oh I've been there. You described the feeling so well in 55 words.
Mine's up too.
Thanks, now I'm tearin up over here!!
I'm missing my 2nd cousins...one is now back home in Australia and the other is enjoying the warmth of sunny LA....:) Have a great weekend!
Oh, I like this!
Aw baby... here's a hug from me. HUG!
Its as if you know shadow somehow whats going on in my mind, weird but calming
“So hold her closer when she cries, hold her closer when she feels. She needs a hand to hold, someone who will never let her go again. And hold him closer when he tries to hold the tears back from his eyes. Don't say goodbye.” ~Song: Hold Her Closer
Lovely Shadow... Hope your weekend goes well :)
Moving poem. And I really like the picture, too. Good paring with the poem. Nice job! D
You do a great thing with only 55 words! Splendid Shadow.
CLAY
darn good! Your words always run deep.
Hmmm-read your post on mine....are we on some weird psychic frequency you suppose?
I know more than I really wish about goodbye. Beautifully done.
Such sweet sorrow...
Very nicely done.
god you are good!!!
oh and bloody inspiring!
Thanks, I even have have that tear now
peace hugs and kisses
steve
Did you just read my mind. With everything going on in my little world your writings all ways bring me back to center
I can never help feeling the raw emotion in your words. Your a beautiful soulful writer dear one! (Hugs)Indigo
Quite a challenge, a story in so few words. Well done.
Some people believe goodbyes do not exist, but only "until next times..."
OMG, the sorrow and feeling. "til the time's again ours". wonderment of words!
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