Friday, May 22, 2009

55 - lullaby of non-existence



every friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a try...post your story and report to the boss G-Man!







i weep for touch that shows you’re here
a warmth that breaks through the veneer
to fill the absence in my heart
to break the feeling of apart
i weep for you to fill the absence
change the song to stirring cadence
to fill the nothingness in my heart
to hold me ‘til sorrows depart











40 comments:

  1. How wonderfully talented you are, Shadow.

    More wonderful is that you share it so freely.

    And more wonderful than THAT--is the God, the Creator, the SOURCE of all talent, has smiled on you in this fashion.

    Positively beautiful, picture, and 55 word piece. Thank you!

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  2. I'm not a lover of poetry but I really like this one. It makes you feel and that's what a good poem should do. All of that emotion in just 55 words.
    Well done.

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  3. absolutely beautiful -- touching -- emotion filled

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  4. WE dragons don't understand much of your human emotions but we do know what it means to be lonely. Good poem that captures that feeling.
    Great 55

    Ours is up here
    http://www.dragonlairs.blogspot.com/

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  5. God damn I drop by here to thank you for your support and I run into a 55 word love poem... damn your good... hows that saffron lounge..missed ya chick and thanks for the kick start back to life

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  6. I'm SOOO far behind on your work here. I guess because it always makes me think and that's been a luxury I haven't had time for lately. I can so relate to this one.

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  7. I think that somehow we are parts of the same pieces just separated before birth...

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  8. A touch to ignite dieing embers
    Very nice

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  9. Reading this I experience longing, that desire to connect in a profound way with another human being.

    As I read, I know that God is ultimately the only thing that can do for me what your poem looks for.

    Sometimes God expresses himself through another human being.

    Love your 55,
    Prayer Girl

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  10. Weeping to fill the emptiness and nothingness. Sad but true.

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  11. You can see your fans love your sentiments. Are you familiar with womaninawindow ? or her other blog, throughthebackdoor? Her poetry might be of interest to you, as well as picsandpictures.

    I love how you focus and deliver.

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  12. awe I think I've missed reading your poems too long, very sweet 55

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  13. Maybe it is the tears that fill the void of another's absence...

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  14. Shadow Dancing...
    I sooo am going to send this to someone..
    You Fricking Rock My World!!!
    Great 55
    Great piece of prose...
    Have a Great Week-End...G

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  15. Quite a challenge I would imagine - writing a story in less than 55 words. You have achieved a success with it. Amazingly inspirational pictures you choose too.
    Blessings, Star

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  16. ooooo that one reached past my surly appearance and touched my heart... very nicely done :)

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  17. Hi, Shads-I know that weeping and longing of which you speak so well. Love the pic too. great 55, have a cool weekend. ~rick

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  18. That is so meaningful to me and where I am in life, going on my motorbike to work could be midlife crisis.
    Im exhaused just written the longest blog post ever, really poured my heart into asnsweing the question within the award.
    Feel so renewed reading your lovely poem.
    I love the Bradley Poem as well that is the magic of blogging isnt it!

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  19. This one gives me the chills ... a combination of the words, the picture, and the E Nomine song that's playing on the stereo, I think.

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  20. Shadow I love this. I think everyone has that desire to be wanted, loved, touched, and not to be alone well done.

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  21. Oh! this poem is so exquisite Shadow and just how I feel.

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  22. Oh sometimes it's beautiful to pine.

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  23. Peel away the thin skin
    coverin' the heart of wood
    and in His entering
    the flesh of the tree
    becomes human again.

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  24. Shadow?!!!! This is so warm, sad, loving, feeling, and deep truths all rolled into one. Love it.

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  25. Comforting Shadow. Especially taken by the first line..."I weep...."

    Blessings dear one....

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  26. Gorgeous depiction of longing. You have quite the gift Shadow.

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  27. Hey, I just found all your comments on my blog, thank you, for poking around..
    I am mind boggled by the fact that you and dylan Thomas share a date together..
    what do you suppose it means?
    I hope you had a chance to read a bit of his work..
    your cadence and imagery often remind me of his..
    blessed be

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  28. Wow - this is a challenge I might be able to do, although not as good as you Shadow. This poem (not a story) is beautiful, perfectly balanced in its rhythm, and you managed 55 words too!

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  29. Almost too much... the words, combined with the picture...

    I feel the ache, the want, the longing...

    Very Nice Poetry, Lady... which doesn't even begin to describe...

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  30. lots of feelings run in to this one... sweet 55... your poem touches the soul...always a pleasure to visit your blog..

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