Friday, April 16, 2010

55 - melody of chaos









Collective they stream
down the road like a swarm,
seeking ruin, with cries in the air.
Harm and destruction
secreting a chill
that swells to a violent cold dare.

……fragile the silence
they leave in their wake
mongst litter that blows in the breeze,
dark’ning the day
with destructive intent,
when hatred to ruin carries.



picture: http://seduced-by-the-sun.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-Melody-46083099




every friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a try...post your story and report to the boss G-Man




47 comments:

  1. As usual, really nice. My first effort at a 55 is up as well.

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  2. First off I love the title of this piece. It sets the tone for when you read. You can picture exactly what kind of music fits this piece. Dark but awesome. (:

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  3. wow. what beautiful chaos you create. nice 55...

    mine is up!

    and hae a wonderful weekend!

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  4. Strong fluid words in this one Shadow. Well done!

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  5. Pretty powerful 55 for such a beautiful spring day. Today I cherish the fact that I don't live in chaos much anymore. Peace and serenity are usually the order of the day.

    PG

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  6. Well dear... that's chaos... and the pic I love too!
    Hugs

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  7. very well written, the picture is amazing too

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  8. Another Yahoo! 55, Shadow! And lots coming through in just 55... I don't know how you do it!

    Nevine

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  9. How very awesome and that picture is unique as well Shadow. Blessings to you dear one.

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  10. Melancholy truth about hatred. Beautiful and eloquent gift to the subject matter. (Hugs)Indigo

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  11. well, this one is really gud bt as i hv told earlier too m bad at poetry so i can't get d relation or true hidden sense of last 2 lines....
    but still its awesum coz d lines before r enuf to spell bound me wid d theme......

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  12. "……fragile the silence
    they leave in their wake"

    again , i loved your poem , this above is the part that sparkled in soft silence inside my body .

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  13. This was so cool! I felt the chaos in it.

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  14. Excellent - matches up to my day where we just began reading Fahrenheit 451 in class.

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  15. A dark and serious piece. I hope you're safe.

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  16. Shadow Dancing...
    I just love it when you play.
    The perfect 55!!
    Thank you so much for this Gem.
    You Rock The Planet!
    Have a Kick Ass Week-End...

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  17. I like this picture a lot. The title shakes you up and prepares you for the rest.

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  18. You've captured the essence of chaos with amazing descriptions. Reminded me of a crowd rioting, leaving a trail of destruction in its wake.

    My 55 is Molten Words

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  19. Very nice, I am always blown away at your writing, be it 55 or 100, you are like a painter everything is very vivid. Take care.

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  20. Yes ma'am I know that dead silence of noise well. We are creating more of it as we swarm through.

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  21. I can't believe it...I MISSED your 55?!! How on earth did that happen?

    Excellent. And, yes, chaotic.

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  22. Shadow,

    I leave and come back and you always surprise me with your sentimental poems.

    I would like to choose one to post it on my blog during the month of April.

    Khaled

    By the way my URL changed

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  23. '' fragile the silence'' -what lovely imagery!
    and the music to go with it!

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  24. I'm not sure that I fully grasped the image - I think I did the poem, though!

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  25. Whoa Shadow, this reminds me of some of the small town ladies I knew, and the teenage daughters they were training.

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  26. Nice shadow. The melody of chaos isn't harmonious is it?

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  27. very powerful.. and in just 55 words.

    xx

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  28. Simply fantastic!
    You take the art of word-smithery to new heights!

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  29. oh yeah I knew,

    I mean, well most

    oh ya ya ya ya phan-TA-sy

    THAT is not technically softball

    (I have to really be at a field in real life and we have to throw actual balls right?)

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  30. Shadow
    hmmm...the quiet wake that follows the storm
    almost like gloating.
    great image too!
    ~rick

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  31. "Fragile silence"--- beautiful combo. I imagined both scenarios: the volcanic eruption in Iceland and on a lesser scale, a swarm of killer bees. I know it's much deeper than that, but you have given me a few visuals.
    Beautifully written as always!

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  32. as always, well executed. i found more than chaos, i found notes of spoken words meant to tear apart the music itself.

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  33. There's nothing quite so frightening as an angry mob bent on destruction. You captured both the before and after scenes perfectly!

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  34. what craft you posess! thanks for sharing this powerful 55...and for leaving me thinking...

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  35. 44th comment.

    Howdy! Decided to rejoin the party.

    Wen I saw YOU back here, I could not resist being again a "part of" rather than "apart from"...ya know?

    Guess I heard that drum beat all the way from SA

    All is well, V.

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  36. http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/04/25/sunday-special-2/

    5 awards on the bottom of my post.
    enjoy some!
    Happy Sunday!
    thank you for stopping by my place.
    ;)

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  37. love the motion your picture evokes,
    amazing 55.

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