Collective they stream
down the road like a swarm,
seeking ruin, with cries in the air.
Harm and destruction
secreting a chill
that swells to a violent cold dare.
……fragile the silence
they leave in their wake
‘mongst litter that blows in the breeze,
dark’ning the day
with destructive intent,
when hatred to ruin carries.
picture: http://seduced-by-the-sun.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-Melody-46083099
down the road like a swarm,
seeking ruin, with cries in the air.
Harm and destruction
secreting a chill
that swells to a violent cold dare.
……fragile the silence
they leave in their wake
‘mongst litter that blows in the breeze,
dark’ning the day
with destructive intent,
when hatred to ruin carries.
picture: http://seduced-by-the-sun.deviantart.com/art/Chaos-Melody-46083099
every friday, compose a short story of 55 words - no more, no less. if you want to join in the fun and games and give it a try...post your story and report to the boss G-Man 
As usual, really nice. My first effort at a 55 is up as well.
ReplyDeleteFirst off I love the title of this piece. It sets the tone for when you read. You can picture exactly what kind of music fits this piece. Dark but awesome. (:
ReplyDeletewow. what beautiful chaos you create. nice 55...
ReplyDeletemine is up!
and hae a wonderful weekend!
Strong fluid words in this one Shadow. Well done!
ReplyDeletePretty powerful 55 for such a beautiful spring day. Today I cherish the fact that I don't live in chaos much anymore. Peace and serenity are usually the order of the day.
ReplyDeletePG
Well dear... that's chaos... and the pic I love too!
ReplyDeleteHugs
very well written, the picture is amazing too
ReplyDeletePowerful and lucid! Well done, friend!
ReplyDeleteAnother Yahoo! 55, Shadow! And lots coming through in just 55... I don't know how you do it!
ReplyDeleteNevine
How very awesome and that picture is unique as well Shadow. Blessings to you dear one.
ReplyDeleteMelancholy truth about hatred. Beautiful and eloquent gift to the subject matter. (Hugs)Indigo
ReplyDeleteNicely done. :)
ReplyDeletewell, this one is really gud bt as i hv told earlier too m bad at poetry so i can't get d relation or true hidden sense of last 2 lines....
ReplyDeletebut still its awesum coz d lines before r enuf to spell bound me wid d theme......
"……fragile the silence
ReplyDeletethey leave in their wake"
again , i loved your poem , this above is the part that sparkled in soft silence inside my body .
Almost sounds like Woodstock.
ReplyDeleteThis was so cool! I felt the chaos in it.
ReplyDeleteExcellent - matches up to my day where we just began reading Fahrenheit 451 in class.
ReplyDeletewow. I'm speechless.
ReplyDeletestrong, very powerful 55!
ReplyDeleteA dark and serious piece. I hope you're safe.
ReplyDeleteShadow Dancing...
ReplyDeleteI just love it when you play.
The perfect 55!!
Thank you so much for this Gem.
You Rock The Planet!
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...
I like this picture a lot. The title shakes you up and prepares you for the rest.
ReplyDeleteYou've captured the essence of chaos with amazing descriptions. Reminded me of a crowd rioting, leaving a trail of destruction in its wake.
ReplyDeleteMy 55 is Molten Words
Very nice, I am always blown away at your writing, be it 55 or 100, you are like a painter everything is very vivid. Take care.
ReplyDeleteYes ma'am I know that dead silence of noise well. We are creating more of it as we swarm through.
ReplyDeleteI can't believe it...I MISSED your 55?!! How on earth did that happen?
ReplyDeleteExcellent. And, yes, chaotic.
Shadow,
ReplyDeleteI leave and come back and you always surprise me with your sentimental poems.
I would like to choose one to post it on my blog during the month of April.
Khaled
By the way my URL changed
This is chilling!
ReplyDeleteooooo... violins, without sax! ;)
ReplyDelete'' fragile the silence'' -what lovely imagery!
ReplyDeleteand the music to go with it!
I'm not sure that I fully grasped the image - I think I did the poem, though!
ReplyDeleteWhoa Shadow, this reminds me of some of the small town ladies I knew, and the teenage daughters they were training.
ReplyDeleteNice shadow. The melody of chaos isn't harmonious is it?
ReplyDeletevery powerful.. and in just 55 words.
ReplyDeletexx
Simply fantastic!
ReplyDeleteYou take the art of word-smithery to new heights!
oh yeah I knew,
ReplyDeleteI mean, well most
oh ya ya ya ya phan-TA-sy
THAT is not technically softball
(I have to really be at a field in real life and we have to throw actual balls right?)
I like the line:
ReplyDeleteFragile the silence
Shadow
ReplyDeletehmmm...the quiet wake that follows the storm
almost like gloating.
great image too!
~rick
"Fragile silence"--- beautiful combo. I imagined both scenarios: the volcanic eruption in Iceland and on a lesser scale, a swarm of killer bees. I know it's much deeper than that, but you have given me a few visuals.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written as always!
as always, well executed. i found more than chaos, i found notes of spoken words meant to tear apart the music itself.
ReplyDeleteThere's nothing quite so frightening as an angry mob bent on destruction. You captured both the before and after scenes perfectly!
ReplyDeleteVery well done.
ReplyDeletewhat craft you posess! thanks for sharing this powerful 55...and for leaving me thinking...
ReplyDelete44th comment.
ReplyDeleteHowdy! Decided to rejoin the party.
Wen I saw YOU back here, I could not resist being again a "part of" rather than "apart from"...ya know?
Guess I heard that drum beat all the way from SA
All is well, V.
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ReplyDelete5 awards on the bottom of my post.
enjoy some!
Happy Sunday!
thank you for stopping by my place.
;)
love the motion your picture evokes,
ReplyDeleteamazing 55.