it was by the muted candlelight
that i looked at you with new eyes,
the hair’s casual fall into your face,
shielding you from the pressures of life.
your lips so soft, gently curled in a smile
to an echo you solely could hear,
your skin with the etches of time displayed,
though to me this is but a veneer.
i’m engulfed by an urge to open this book
of thoughts that you keep deep inside,
to hear those whispers only you can hear,
to be filled by the dreams that your hide.
to see the sketches you keep concealed
as you say when they happen, i’ll know,
but i’d much prefer to support the idea
than be offered the finished rainbow.
i’d like to be there when the timeline extends,
maybe offer my love and my thoughts.
achievement is something that you measure by
yet the forming’s what gets me caught.
the range of your vision, the style of design
is what makes you who lies beside me,
give me a piece, just a crumb at a time,
please believe, when i say, trust in me…
that i looked at you with new eyes,
the hair’s casual fall into your face,
shielding you from the pressures of life.
your lips so soft, gently curled in a smile
to an echo you solely could hear,
your skin with the etches of time displayed,
though to me this is but a veneer.
i’m engulfed by an urge to open this book
of thoughts that you keep deep inside,
to hear those whispers only you can hear,
to be filled by the dreams that your hide.
to see the sketches you keep concealed
as you say when they happen, i’ll know,
but i’d much prefer to support the idea
than be offered the finished rainbow.
i’d like to be there when the timeline extends,
maybe offer my love and my thoughts.
achievement is something that you measure by
yet the forming’s what gets me caught.
the range of your vision, the style of design
is what makes you who lies beside me,
give me a piece, just a crumb at a time,
please believe, when i say, trust in me…
Oh my girl ... wonderfully written, as always. Communication - we all need and yearn for it. It's hard when the one to whom we've committed ourselves doesn't understand that - and doesn't share.
ReplyDeleteYour best Love poem as far as I've been reading you. OH Dear Shadow how I love your words, without exception...
ReplyDeleteBut these two lines... WOW
'...but i’d much prefer to support the idea
than be offered the finished rainbow...'
oh i really like this one...one story at a bok the book unfolds, so as not to scare you away and keep you coming back for more...
ReplyDeleteMagnificent. Only a very strong relationship can lead to that kind of trust - of giving the most intimate thoughts and dreams.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Shadow. It was nice!
ReplyDeleteSecretia
Being eager and hungry to hear what is so deep inside another is scary. It takes a long time for someone to be able to trust enough to share like that. This is a very lovely post. It gives me shivers really. I look at my hubby's sweet smile peeking out under his mustache and know it is for only me. The way you write is intimate and wondrous.
ReplyDeletelucky bastard .
ReplyDeletedoes he now how many guys want to be at his place right now ?!!
maybe because he PRETENDS he doesn't care , you are writing this .
Hey wow... came here after a long time...and ur poems still enthrall me...ossum!!!
ReplyDeleteShadow, this is a poignant piece and I really like the second stanza, the images in it:
ReplyDeletei’m engulfed by an urge to open this book
of thoughts that you keep deep inside,
to hear those whispers only you can hear,
to be filled by the dreams that your hide.
to see the sketches you keep concealed
as you say when they happen, i’ll know,
but i’d much prefer to support the idea
than be offered the finished rainbow.
i often find when i read your poems that something you are saying is also stirring something i have said to myself but of course not this beautiful way, just snips of thoughts. its remarkably psychic in a way
ReplyDeleteOh that's really throbbing a person to go again n again through this poem..
ReplyDeletejolliieess:-)
Shadow, these are exquisite words, all of them. But these sing to me most:
ReplyDeletegive me a piece, just a crumb at a time,
please believe, when i say, trust in me...
This is a wonderful rhyme, not too rhythmic as to sit still...
ReplyDeleteand I love the tenderness you express, my favorite
achievement is something that you measure by
yet the forming’s what gets me caught."
as well as what dulce said.
I always know my favorite poems when I find myself saying, I wish someone would write like that for me. Thank you for writing! This one is very grounded.
Yessss Shadow, it is becoming difficult to know what to say to you. I've used every superlative I know, even borrowed from others', and here I am, looking at ideas and rainbows.
ReplyDeleteIdeas change , but so do rainbows. Never has one stayed where I went to find it. Maybe one day..................
Your writings have been scripted by the fingers of angels...and are timeless.
Your words really pack a punch! It's really making me think about poetry, and my lack of grandeur in my own poems...
ReplyDeletethe worlds that new eyes expose can be so dynamic and wonderful!
ReplyDeletelove that phrase...
a great dedication to a compelling love.
sweet, elegant, beautiful words.
ReplyDeleteIndeed. THanks for sharing your talents with us. You are amazing and a rhetorical genius.
mile 191
Love it! This poem speaks to me.
ReplyDeleteAnd I found it both smart and sexy;)
You rockess with those words my friend...Txo
Lovely words to coax the sharing, the understanding.
ReplyDeleteEverything takes time to mature, to ripen and be sweetly appreciated.
i love every word, every image in this piece...it's peaceful, warm, and inviting...
ReplyDeleteextremely well done!
smiles,
This is a great one Shadow. Thanks for sharing it.
ReplyDeleteAhhh the trust factor..... thought provoking one Shadow. Thank you...
ReplyDeleteI love the line about the finished rainbow!
ReplyDeleteI adore the rhythm, emotion, and thoughts of this poem. Just beautiful.
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Amazing! you rendered me speechless.
ReplyDeleteI trust you.
ReplyDeleteShadow, this is beautiful. But I'm not surprised, you're awesome! I love visiting your place, like plunging into a fresh box of chocolates :P
ReplyDeleteHope your holiday is filled with much love and peace... Hugs, my dear friend!
http://stillorinshelp.blogspot.com/ Thanks for asking. I posted the move. I guess I need to link the posts all the time. jeNN
ReplyDeleteOh, just so you know, you have been a true inspiration to me and I thank you very much. :)jeNN
ReplyDeleteThat is truly a beautiful expression of love. The trust would be well placed.
ReplyDeletelove and trust are inseparable... kill one, the other dies as well....
ReplyDeleteI have an award for you, please claim it on my blog. Thanks.^^
ReplyDeleteIt is a brilliant and real master piece of every word use is so.. perfect and powerful.
ReplyDeleteMagical to say the least, I love your MIND..what a masterpiece it is, and we are all so blessed to admire this UNIQUE, BRILLIANT, ONE
ReplyDeleteHUGS
often i wish i could write as good as u Shadow..i really enjoy your poems..they tend to make me think..i duno why..
ReplyDeletekeep on writing..
waiting for your next post..
"achievement is something that you measure by yet the forming’s what gets me caught."
ReplyDeleteYou have very deep thoughts in what you write that is what keeps me coming back to your blog. This one seems a bit different than what you usually write for some reason.
"i’d much prefer to support the idea than be offered the finished rainbow." This part also stood out to me by saying so much with so little.
Great work!
Shadow- funny how candle light is always muted but says so much. I don't think so much of the one who will trust but the responsibility on the one who offers. Weird, huh? ~rick
ReplyDeleteYes shadow
ReplyDeleteif the question was posed to me of course I trust you. You are one of integrity.
You don't have to tell me I can before I loose all skepticism.
Because of your integrity, all of your words, are 'your word' without having to give them to me.
Shadow I never show gratitude toward your kind gesture towards me. The wiping clean my debts of disrespect and person to person insults taken as dishonor.
I did not understand went went on that day. A time when I was reading posts (as many as I could) as fast as i could and still being able to give my perceived conclusion meaning.
I paid little attention to the comments. Knowing now what you did, I feel in debt.
Knowing now what I do, before my stay as a guest ends I need to apologize for disturbing the peace of your community and apologize to the members of your community.
Just as I misjudged Uncle Tree (he has more integrity than I)
When in a heart numbed painful rant of a post, followed it with a plee to stop "mean spirited" posts (which none were, all light hearted, possibly even offers of helping me put together a presentable residence as my current presentation is sub par)
Even though there have been NO haunting after your good will....
I still read offers of condolence for my sorrow.
A compassionate community, whose members earned my respect without demanding it, appear to me to have also earned my trust.
forgive the ramble please
in regards to your post, you have my trust. being able to share the thoughts (fleeting random as well as deep) many or all the constantly churning thoughts
of which the majority aren't birthed by speech
is not something I take lightly. But is something I desire to do
I liked the last call one... but LOVE this one! Its compelling to read! Brilliant!
ReplyDeleteHave a wonderful week!
This is one of your ultimate bests, absolutely. There is a 'power' in this one.
ReplyDeleteIt's so supportive and loving and the way love should be.
Bravo, dear Shadow!
lips, curling into a smile with the echoes....love it.
ReplyDeletejust a crumb at a time...beautiful! i'm famished! :)
ReplyDeleteI've sat here reading, re-reading and re-re-reading this one. The words just keep pulling me in.
ReplyDelete"... achievement is something that you measure by, yet the forming’s what gets me caught." Now that is just perfection ... marrying acceptance with the desire to give. I love it.
xx Jos